Digital Voiceover video

 

Feedback on our first draft

 Our first was ok but there was some thing that was missing the emotions were not there at that point and we were still trying to find out how were going to tie everything together to get the message to our viewers. we had to lower our background noise so that the character voice can make a impact we had to show more emotions so people can feel what everyone is going though in that exact moment, add a higher tone. we also  had to fix our transition and make sure it was smooth. 

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First Draft